It's Book Review Wednesday, my favorite day of the week! Today's review is on a topic close to my heart: murders and assassinations…
Unrelenting NightmareStuart Garrison, a virtual reality software developer on the cusp of industry domination, navigates a deadly cat-and-mouse game with an international assassin hired by his fierce competitor. The stakes are high, as Garrison tries to outwit his clever potential killer while releasing an innovative new technology to the world.
My Review: 4 StarsStarting off with that blurb--it's just not right! The focus of the book is mainly on the assassin (Clark Cameron), with Stuart being the sort of "lesser bad guy". It's an iffy blurb that doesn't tell you the real truth of the book. The book is really about the assassin, and it paints an intriguing picture of the fellow. Though he is technically the book's antagonist, I found myself rooting for him. Imagine the avarice of Deadpool with the morals of a supervillain and the planning skills of the Punisher--that's Cameron Clark. I have to say that I heartily enjoyed the book. I read through it fairly quickly, and it was hard to put the thing down. The villain is particularly enjoyable, and I kind of wanted him to win, though it wouldn't have worked for the story. That being said, there were a lot of weaknesses with the book: Typos and word misuses. The author used "flack" instead of "flak", "sport hero" instead of "sports hero", "Revelry" instead of "Reveille", "dialect" instead of "accent", "speculation ran rapid" instead of "rampant", "tan" instead of "tanned", and a few others. Then there were expressions that make sense and are commonly used, but which shouldn't be part of a narrative--such as the expression "well fit" or "go stealth". POV. There was A LOT of head-hopping, and the omnipotent description of it all is a bit amateurish. For example, the narrator tells a character's back story, when it would have been more powerful had the character relived it through memory or dialogue.
- A LOT of telling, rather than showing. That last example of the narration is just one, but there was a lot of "he heard", "he saw", and "he watched". We know it's from the character's POV, but the way he uses these words pulls us out of the action. All in all, the writing was a bit clunky and hamfisted in places, with a lot of passive writing.